"What about you, Sam?"
"Huh?"
I focused back to my circle of friends. Two were seated against the black futon, one rested on the floor against my pink pillow, I sat on my purple rug. I did it again. I tuned out.
"If your wedding was tomorrow, what would your colors be?"
My mind didn't hesitate: Mint green and jade.
My mouth had other plans: "Different shades of purple."
"Oh duh, I should've known," my roommate piped up from the top bunk. "Because your favorite color is purple."
My mind chimed in first, again: Yes, but mint green goes best with piercing blue.
Only to be covered up, again, with spoken words:"Yeah, you got me."
"What about your first dance?" asked one of the girls against the black futon. "Let me guess, a John Mayer song?"
One of The Fray's songs. No even a question.
"Got me again."
My roommate laughed and chimed in again, "Oh, Sami. You're so predictable! What about your venue? I bet it's a beach in California and a huge after party. Am I right?"
The music center in Cincinatti. Alone, with a few family and friends.
"You know how much I've always loved the beach."
That one wasn't a lie. Beaches calmed me. The tide rolled in and out, in and out. It never failed to come back to where my feet were planted in the sand.
But he always failed - so, I picked a new color.
Wow! I am in love with this piece! I think it shows a really interesting friend dynamic and says a lot about you. It speaks to how we change in order to not disrupt the norm. I also really loved it because my friends and I play games like this a lot. All of your pieces are just so relatable for me!
ReplyDeleteBut, whoa. What's the last line?
DeleteHey Sam,
ReplyDeleteTo start off, I'm pretty surprise how this piece turned out. The language is pretty concise and you make excellent use of dialogues. The selling point of this story is the conflict between your mind and your mouth, the mixed-uppedness of your identity, which adds up to the metaphor of how you're not as predictable as you are, really inside. But, there isn't a reason of conflict to why you conform, and I think it would be great to have just one line that hints on that--subtle. You did a lot with a little. Bravo. You deserve some good old Louisiana Hot Sauce!
I like this a lot, but I think Josh is right. The hint we get as to why you changed comes in the last line, but then I want to know so much more!
ReplyDeleteThis could be an extended essay. Other things you're conflicted about?
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